Avoid excessively long sentences.
• Despite their significance in
contemporary society, social movements seldom solve social problems, because in
order to mobilize resources a movement must appeal to a broad constituency,
which means that the group must focus on large-scale issues which are deeply
imbedded in society.
Avoid
unnecessary repetition and redundancy.
• Life offers many lessons about life.
• People seem to learn things best
when they learn them firsthand.
• I was caught unexpectedly off guard
by the boss.
• He told me I had successfully made
the grade on my new job.
• There are many new features that can
be found on my computer.
• It is recommended that all
candidates be on time for their interview.
Eliminate
wordy phrases.
• As a matter of fact
• At the present time
• At this point in time
• Due to the fact that
• In spite of the fact that
• In the event that
• In the final analysis
• Until such as time as
Avoid
noun-heavy style.
• The preference of most writers is
for an understanding of their composing as a species of fine frenzy.
• Thomas Jefferson was not a believer
in the divinity of Jesus Christ and indeed was the author of a version of the
Four Gospels that included the removal of all references to “miraculous”
events.
• Before making the purchase of a new
car, one should always perform an examination on it.
Choose
words that express meaning precisely.
• A democratic type of government
basically requires a pretty informed citizenry.
Make
comparisons complete and clear.
• Talk radio has become a popular form
of entertainment because it gets people more involved.
• Abstract expressionism was more
influenced by cubism than surrealism.
Use
definite, specific, concrete language.
• A period of unfavorable weather set
in. / It rained every day for a week.
• He showed satisfaction as he took
possession of his well-earned award. / He grinned as he pocketed the coin.
• You should also avoid excessive use
of clichés and mixed metaphors.
o General public, Everyday life, In today’s society, This day
and age, All walks of life, Behind the eight ball, Bitter end, Calm before the
storm, Fall on deaf ears, From time immemorial, In the nick of time, In the
same boat, Leaps and bounds, Never a dull moment, Whirlwind tour, Writing on
the wall.
Motown Diary
ReplyDeleteBy: Jayden
Dear Diary,
It is the 1960s, and I got invited into a group called Motown, though I will tell you about my time with them. I like to sing when I was 20 years old when this guy was named Berry Gordy, Jr. Ask me something he said “want to join Motown” I did not know what Motown was, so I asked him what is Motown he said it was a group of people who like to sing. So I told him why not, so I joined? The group included Maurice King, Smokey Robinson, Cholly Atkins, Maxine Powell, and Berry Gordy, Jr. Motown was in the USA. I sang a song for them, and give me tips for singing. Maurice King helped me be a better music director, Smokey Robinson helped me be a better singer and how he told me he made one of his first albums, Berry Gordy, Jr. Told what Motown was and how he was the Motown's founder, Cholly Atkins helped me how to dance and created routines for other people like would like to join Motown and Maxine Powell helped me to sing and told me to go to her classes for at least 2 hours a day. I felt happy because I was getting help from good singers, I felt uncountable I do not know them, I felt not good because I felt like I was not a good singer, and I was nervous because I thought they would make fun of me for my singing. I felt they taught me how to sing, dance, who the founder was and how to be a music director. They taught me who did what, Maurice King was the music director, Smokey Robinson was Motown’s first singer, Berry Gordy, Jr. Was Motown’s founder, Cholly Atkins helped singers and to dance and created routines for them and Maxine Powell she would train singers will to sing better. Then I left Motown, but came back they told me to play a song, so I did, and they said it was bad, but bad means (awesome) they told me I improved so much as singing. I was so happy to be with them. They helped me a lot in singing, and I was glad to be with Motown’s members.
From Jayden D’souza